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Subjugation - Chapter 1: Subjugation by Sovran

Tue, 06/16/2009 - 22:29

    “You will never defeat me!” Voldemort cried.

    “Yes, Tom,” Harry said, dreading the reprimand he knew was coming.

    The Dark Lord pointed his wand at Harry’s heart. “Do not use that filthy Muggle name!”

    Harry berated himself for forgetting. “I’m sorry, Lord Voldemort. I won’t do it again, Lord Voldemort.”

    “Harry! For Merlin’s sake, just ignore it!” Ginny called from upstairs.

    He knew better than to answer.

    Ron shoved the side of the frame, causing Tom to lose his balance and drop his wand. “Why do you two keep this around, anyway?”

    Harry shrugged and grinned. “It’s great for parties.”

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    Tue, 06/16/2009 - 23:19 — jediprankster

    It's great for parties?

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    It's great for parties? That's funny. I especially like how you don't reveal that it's a portrait until the second to last line.

    Wed, 06/17/2009 - 01:46 — Rhetor
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    Layers

    *Snort* Everything you write has a dozen layers.

    I especially like the hint of BDSM and Ginny's apparent commentary on it. One wonders what her whole role in this game is...

    Wed, 06/17/2009 - 05:52 — hitokirichapin

    Im curious....

    Nice drabble. I could see how having a portrait LV could be entertaining. Like those "magic" eight balls.

    What happened to "The Contract"?

    Wed, 06/17/2009 - 19:34 — Sovran
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    Thanks

    jediprankster wrote:

    It's great for parties? That's funny. I especially like how you don't reveal that it's a portrait until the second to last line.

    Thanks. I tried to put that off as long as I could, and that was as far as I could go if I wanted to keep the last line as I imagined it.

    Rhetor wrote:

    I especially like the hint of BDSM and Ginny's apparent commentary on it. One wonders what her whole role in this game is...

    Hint? What hint?

    Just who is subjugating whom, here? The eye of the beholder, indeed . . .

    I must admit that I originally had Ginny saying something else, with much less hidden meaning. I devised the existing line when I was looking to shave a few words off of the drabble. So, quite satisfyingly, the wordcount limitation led me to a much better line overall. And honestly, the double/triple meanings became much clearer in general as I trimmed the story. It was a fascinating exercise.

    For the record, Ginny’s original line was:
    “Harry, did you set that stupid thing off again?” Ginny’s voice called from the corridor.

    Even changing ‘the corridor’ to ‘upstairs’ contributed to the overall tone, and at first I really just wanted to save one word.

    I can certainly see why you find drabbles so appealing.

    hitokirichapin wrote:

    What happened to "The Contract"?

    It’s still out there. Josh and I write scenes for it when we have a few minutes to spare, but we haven’t had so much spare lately. And we’re trying to maintain some sense of rationality in posting, so we can’t yet post scenes that take place far into the mysterious future of the story.